It was the post on the weblog

Dear all nice girls,

Hope you are doing great. I'd like to announce that this was the last week you were required to write in your weblog. Your stories on "Mike and Sun- he" will not be corrected. Just publish a post about the story and have fun with reading your own story and your classmates' stories.

Fingers crossed
Ms. Mozaffari

My general comments on your posts

Dear All,

As you know this week you wrote about your daily activities and routines. It was a nice job indeed. Here you will find my general comments on your posts:

1) when the topic is writing about your daily routines, the name implies that you need to use Simple Present Tense. Here you will find a model paragraph. while reading par attention to the use of verbs, all of them are in present simple form:

Getting Ready for the Day

I do many things to get ready for the day. I get up at 6:30 A.M. First, I take a shower. Then I get dressed, fix my hair, and put on my makeup.  At 7:15 A.M., I wake up my husband and my children. I help my children get dressed. Then we have breakfast. At 8:00, I walk my daughter to the bus for school. After that, I drive my son to day care. Finally, I go to school for my 9:00 class. That is my busy morning routine.

2) To tell the time you use this structure: It is 6:30 A.Am/P.M

3) Remember that when you finish your writing, it is yet your first draft. You should revise and edit it for content, grammar, spelling and mechanics (Punctuation, capitalization).

4) Always choose a good title for your writing. The first letter of each word in the title should be capitalized.

5) Start working with a grammar book like Basic Grammar by Betty Azar. It includes many activities for each grammar point.

6) Always check dictionary for spelling of the words and above that for the use of the words. For example, you want to use the verb "arrive" in your sentence. Check this verb to make sure how it is used in the sentence. We do not say "arrive to" but we say "arrive at/in a place"


I wish you the best
Mozaffari

In The Name Of God

Hello to all

I'm Maryam Abbariki and will say about my daily activities .

I wake up at 6 am every morning . I have a cup of tee and make breakfast. I usually see (watch)TV while I have my breakfast (Me too dear). I like to have a shower before I get dressed . I go to university . After I have finished , I go home to cook lunch . In my house I usually make lunch. I and my husband eat launch together at two am (happy to me). After lunch I go to bed . I Gget up at five pm . I and my husband go for a for talk to park . We go home to cook dinner . After dinner we chill out on the sofa (a nice expression you used, thanks ) and watch television. We go to bathroom at 12 pm (we take a bath. This structure is better. Is n't it?) . I  set the alarm so I wake up in the morning .The last things I do is locking the door, turning off the lights, and going to bed (or you can say Finally I lockm turn and go) .End of The end))

Darling,

Really really a great piece. I am sure you revise your piece a lot. I am certain you get help from your respected husband as you said. This is a good job to do, just ask him to explain the rules for you so that you could grasp the reason for the edits.

Congrats my Maryam

These are three prizes for you along with lots of kisses

Hug

Mozaffari

P.S: Nice pics

Hello, all dears,

I'm Helya.

I'd like to describe about my daily works.

I awake (wake up) at 6 o'clock , everyday .I make the breakfast and tea ready the break fast and tea . I go at to the office, after the eating breakfast.My work's  time is 9 timepiece (I start work at 9). I  usually of 7:30 upto 16:30 at the office (I am usually at the office from...to...) . Most often I having lunch at 13:00 o'clock, more times. 

I going every sundays and tuesdays ,at the ILI (I go to ILI on Sundays and Tuesdays)  , ofter the work.When I come to home, I do ready dining table (I set the table) ,  and we are eating dinner. Then, I cooking lunch and dinner for tomorrow.Then, I put dirty spoons, forks, knifes, plates, blows, glasses and etc, at in the dishwasher machine and I do on it.My bedtime,now. I brushing ,I kisses children and I go to bed .

We do buy and play at on Wednesdays  and Fridays. 

My husband  helps  me at with our house's work (chores).

Mike and Sun

A day Mike and Sun going for a gift for Toms brithday.They arrive to a shop electricaltools,They have not alot of for buy gift .They choose a dvd player.It was 129$.Mike say it is very expensive.Mike miff go to out shop .They take divorce. 

zohreh and mojgan

say about my daily works

Hello to all

I'm zohreh and will say about my daily works .

Today is Mmonday , I wake at 6.30 o'clock, I doing get  ready for to go to work ,clock is start work Iat 8,I go to work in the tamin in unit IT.o clock end work is 17,I

I Reach to home at o'clock 19.I always eat lunch in the at work.Every time I return home I am tired but we should also do our work.Cooking, cleaning, and a little bit of time to reach.I sleep o'clock 1 at 1 o'clock Morning

My dear Marzieh,

Thanks a lot. How much did you spend on your paragraph. Please try hard.

You must get to know about Present Simple more from a grammar book.

Good luck

Describtion my daily work

Hello

I'm Marzieh, my work is divided into two parts. A portion of the production is done at the factory another portion of the research work is done at the office. I'm in week 3 or 4 days in the factory (I am at the factory 3 or 4 days of the week) located in Eshtehard and I work 2 or 3 days at the office in Tehran. I woke up (wake up; you should use present tense why past) at 6 o'clock to go to the factory, I move at 6:30 o'clock and arrived at 8:40 o'clock. I don't eat breakfast , but always I eat fruit and snacks in during the way. I work in a factory is so much , so I go home  move to a house at 18 o'lock (o'çlock) . After , I reaching at home , I eat eating dinner and watching TV and I sleep at 23 o'clock. I want to explain the second . I wake up at 8 o'clock. I eat breakfast and go to the office. My work starts at 9 o'clock. My friends and I eat lunch at 13 o'clock. I comeback to home at 17 o'clock.

Dearest Marzieh,

Another nice peice. Just I expect you to revise and edit your writing after typing it. I t is better first type it in a word doc. Go over it and look at it with a fresh eye and check for grammar more carefully.

Hug

describtion my daily work

Hello to all

I'm zahra (capital) and will say about my daily works (I'd like to describe ...) .

Today is Ssaturday (days of the week start with a capital letter) , I'm wake up at 8 o'clock, I get reday'm doing ready for to go to work ,clock is at 8:45,I go out of home to garage,I driveing to work every day,my office is in the Tehransar city,now I'm in work and eating breakfast for half an hour hourse and after of that I going backdesk up to start my work.I eating lunch at 13:00 o'clock every day,today my lunch is Kofte ,that is very very sapid (you mean?).

Clock It  is 15:00 PM,I usually eating tea or ice cream one or two hourse (spelling) after lunch,now clock is 17:00 PM ,I must go to home , I'm usually arive (spelling) at home tired and I take alittle rest always,after of that eating dinner and taking a shower and if I have home work perform they,I  watchingTVa little tv and eat fruits then I going to wash my face and brush and going to sleep,good night.

My dear Zahra,

Many thansk for your post. You nicely described your daily routines. Just I think you did not take the time to edit and revise your writing. Just you quickly posted a piece here yah???

A few points:

1) to describe habits we use simple present tense (ساختار گرامری حال ساده) rather than present continous using ing. For more information it is better ti refer to a reference grammar book like "Basic grammar understanding by Betty Azar. " Get help from Maryam Abbariki. She bought the book and she is working on that. For example you should say:

I get up at 6. (not I am getting up)

I go to work

T take a bath.

I get back.

I have lunch...

2) to tell the time we use this structure: It is 5:10 am/pm.

3) your title should be A description of my daily work.

Keep going and have nice

Best

A my day

Hi,Dear Dr. Mozaffari,

I'm Leila .H. I want to write about a my day of my life.

I wash my face every morning. I wear my clothes and go to the office with my cars every day. I don’t eat breakfast at home. I eat breakfast at the office. My office is in the Shark gods' (What a weird name! is it the name of the street). I have a private the room. My office is on the 8th floor. I talk on the phone with the staff at of the universities and hospitals. I am often in meetings. I am sometimes sent go to missions outside of Tehran. I will go to a mission the in  Kerman after 2 weeks. I am middle management of office. Our department staff is are working hard because of it is out come rules. I read my emails and I answer to my letters. I`m going back home PM. I would clean my house. I make dinner ready for dinner and tomorrow of lunch. I will speak by on the telephone with my sister and my mother every afternoon. My I check viber messages then send messages to my friends. I go to the bathroom (I take a bath/shower) and wash my body. I study articles or English every day. I watch TV sometimes. I eat dinner with my family and my wash the pot dinner (and then wash the dishes I take care of the dishes) and my put spoons, forks, plates in the dishwasher. I  brush my teeth before I go to bed. Excuse me teacher with my writing (why dear Leila you have done a magnificent job. I am really proud of you)

Dear Leila,

Very many thanks for the nice paragraph. You described your wok very beautifully. It seems you have a difficult job and I am sure you take care of your chores well. I wish you success.

About your writing just care about your use of the "nouns" more; when shall you use  a/an before singular nouns and when to add an "s" to the end of the plural nouns.

Have fun

Mozaffari

Melika-Works daily

In the name of God.

I to wake up at 6 ocloc (spelling) on school year every day.

I toshutdown 14ocloc every day.

I to study and I watching tv TV.

I go to  English language classroom any every week.

And our we go to the mountains on  fridays.

Why do you bring "to" before verbs????????????

My Dearest Melika,

First I'd like to note that among the teenagers in the class you are the one who participates in the weblog. This clearly shows that you are particularly interested in English langauge. This makes me very glad. Melika janam your command of English is good but please try to practice more with both grammar and spelling. Do not stop and keep going. You can watch films, listen to songs and read English simplified stories to improve your learning.

*Jut why did you post three times??????? Please delete the previous ones. 
*you forgot to tick the correct week (week 6) under دسته بندی
*your title should be daily works (adjective before noun)

Lots of loves and kisses
Mozaffari

Hello all,

As for the topic of the 6th week, I want you to submit a paragraph in which you are required to:

"Describe your daily activities and routines that you do at home or at work; what do you do in the morning, at noon, in the after noon and at night, the time you get up, you go to bed and have your meals, what are your tasks everyday, the time of activities and your hobbies in your free time and the stuff like these".

Your due date is next Sunday.

Enjoy your journey!!!

Best

Mozaffari